Comments on: SFFS for September 1: It’s not easy being a technomage

By: SFFS 9-15: Making magic on the fly – Clan Elves of the Bitterroot

SFFS 9-15: Making magic on the fly – Clan Elves of the Bitterroot — Sat, 15 Sep 2012 05:21:41 +0000

[...] up on the excerpt from THE ELF GUARDIAN on September 1, Lane Donatelli has brainstormed through the shrapnel of his mind and finally come up with a plan [...]

By: Angie Derek

Angie Derek — Sun, 02 Sep 2012 14:26:55 +0000

Ha ha. Love the last line. Can feel him suddenly scrambling to think of something.

By: Heidi Ruby Miller (@heidirubymiller)

Heidi Ruby Miller (@heidirubymiller) — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 22:45:48 +0000

I like the history between Jelly Bean and Lane, especially how you hint at it here without going overboard and drawing us away from the present action. Nice layering!!

:) Heidi

By: Lyndi

Lyndi — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 20:42:43 +0000

Everyone’s doing different parts of this ritual, and the mage of the air is talking about how the wind speaks to her. Lane is like “Whatever,” totally ignoring the fact that he deals with similarly unreal ephemera every day online. He’s solidly in the technical world, even though one of the elves has infused his laptop with magic. So he’s got to come up with some part of the ritual that uses his technical skillset/or the magic computer that will also help the ritual to tame the out-of-control energy vortex. And he can’t think of anything.

By: Sue Ann Bowling

Sue Ann Bowling — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 18:07:50 +0000

So what’s he supposed to do? Get the wind to speak to his computer?

By: Lyndi

Lyndi — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 17:49:27 +0000

Thank you all for stopping by!

By: JC Cassels

JC Cassels — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 16:04:29 +0000

Sweet! I love this internal tension you’ve got going. Nicely done!

By: T.K. Toppin

T.K. Toppin — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 14:34:17 +0000

Great stuff!! Love the names and your quirky humour!!

By: Patrick Stutzman (@PatrickStutzman)

Patrick Stutzman (@PatrickStutzman) — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 13:24:38 +0000

I’m liking your story more and more with each snippet I read. Great stuff here! Your work just inspired another story for me.

By: T. M. Hunter

T. M. Hunter — Sat, 01 Sep 2012 12:14:48 +0000

Enjoyed the last paragraph (and the closing tag), but then I’m just a fan of dialogue over narrative…good stuff, though!